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Both creatures, large and small began to follow me. "Little one, you aren't needed any longer." I knew I was being rude but I had to hurry back. Clambering on the large creature's back I began directing it urgently, eager to get back in time. My sight was beginning to blur and I began to have trouble breathing. I was fidgeting and wriggling in my seat but no spot seemed comfortable, and I felt so very, very hot. My body was going numb and rigid and I could barely move my limbs but I still attempted to move a clawed hand in the direction I thought I needed to go. The pain in my hands and feet began shooting up my arms and legs, like electricity was coursing through them. I cried out in terror and collapsed onto the creatures back, tears streaming down my cheeks as my body began to curl up. My sight began melting away but I managed to focus enough see a large silhouette come to me as the light faded.
Why did I post this? Two reasons. A little to show you part of my novel but mostly to show you what happens to me when I seizure.

Remember how in my journals I mentioned I have seizures when I'm on the computer too long? That's assuming you even read them lol Well that's what I go through. The part at the beginning and end with the creature and blacking out, those are made up to attatch the chapter to the previous and next scenes. The rest of it however (at least the feelings) are 100% (okay 98%) correct.

And that, in short is why I don't like being on too long - I HATE going through that. Scary, huh? Try living it instead of reading it lol
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As your proof-reader for this novel I can say that it's pretty good. And in the description, I know what you mean as I have a very different connection with reading and writing, I feel what you go through by reading what the character is going through. I like it when people interpret their own experiences/lives/personalities into their stories. So it's obvious that I love reading you're work.

Rating time! (for all that I have read.)

Originality: 4/5
Story-line: 5/5
Characters: 5/5
Creativity: 4/5

Overall: Everything I read is amazing. If you want to know more of what I think without me giving away the rest of it, contact me via note. :P :)
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NotaFullDeck Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you are so lucky to pass out love. I've always stayed fully consious when having a seizure and it hurts like hell
Strudel--Cutie4427 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013   Writer
That part was just added because it was part of my story (my long LONG story lol) But that and the first part with the creatures I made up. Everything else is what happens (I guess I didn't make it clear enough) so I don't pass out (wish I did :()
NotaFullDeck Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ah. yeah I wish i did too
Strudel--Cutie4427 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013   Writer
Sorry for taking a while to reply - I'm still getting through all my notes.
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