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My first memory was of gaining conciousness. Where was I? What was I doing here? Who was I? I looked around for some form of a trigger, some way to regain my memory, but there was nothing. I was just floating in the middle of nowhere...
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I had to get out of there and fast. I didn't know why, but something in my fractured memory seemed to be telling me that I couldn't afford to stay, not if I wanted to live. After some difficulty, I managed to wrench the door open. My feet hit the floor and suddenly the feeling of weightlessness was gone. Without a moment's break, I begun a mad dash to get out...
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I blinked back the tears as I listened, trying to ignore the fact my foot had gone to sleep, fearful that one movement would give me away. All these terrible horrible nightmares I had been having; they were all real!
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I had to get out of there and fast. I didn't know why, but something in my fractured memory seemed to be telling me that I couldn't afford to stay, not if I wanted to live. After some difficulty, I managed to wrench the door open. My feet hit the floor and suddenly the feeling of weightlessness was gone. Without a moment's break, I begun a mad dash to get out...
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I blinked back the tears as I listened, trying to ignore the fact my foot had gone to sleep, fearful that one movement would give me away. All these terrible horrible nightmares I had been having; they were all real!
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Just some random scenes from a random story... So, what do you guys think?
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While I've read something sort of like this, you keep it original, you give us a view into what might turn (and most probably will) turn into a great story. You're technique has improved a lot from when I first started helping you, even in these little snippets.
Keep up the good work!